SAT作文修改實(shí)例(三).

學(xué)生習(xí)作（第一段）

語(yǔ)言修改

People often focus mostly on the advantageous side when they make a decision. Thus they often neglect the other side of the decision, which may lead to an unpleasant end. My family was also not able to avoid this kind of regrettable experience. From that failure, we should see both sides of an issue.

Most often when people make a decision they focus on the advantages. Thus they often neglect the other side of the decision, which may lead to an unpleasant end. My family was also not able to avoid this kind of regrettable experience. From that failure, we should see both sides of an issue.

學(xué)生習(xí)作（第二段）

語(yǔ)言修改

My family used to live in a village, but my parents went to urban to work and I to study. It was a long distance, so we had to spend an average of 3.5 hours in our car everyday. We had to get up early to set out and return home late at night. Moreover, we could not watch TV together, but be together in the car, feeling sleepy. Of course, we were unwilling to accept the situation and we thought of moving to the urban area to save our time and to live a more convenient life. So we did, half a year ago.

My family used to live in a village, but my parents moved[1] to the city to work and I to study. It was a long distance to travel to the city every day with an average of 3.5 hours spent in our car.[2] We had to get up early to set out and return home late at night. Unlike other families that watch TV or have other fun together, we spent hours in a car, which was boring and even painful. Of course, this situation was unacceptable to us so we thought of moving to the city to save time and make our lives more convenient.[3]. So we did, half a year ago.

學(xué)生習(xí)作（第三段）

語(yǔ)言修改

Bore we made up our minds, we did investigated what trouble we would face. We were optimist to conclude that there was only one thing[4], the higher cost of living, which we could set aside by less using the car. We also predicted that we could gain profits such as a lot of time we used to spend on highways, convenient life, etc.

Bore we made up our minds, we investigated what troubles we may face[5]. We were optimistic that the only obstacle was the higher cost of living which we could offset by using the car less. We also concluded we would gain a lot in terms of[6] less time spent on the road, more convenient lifestyle, etc.

學(xué)生習(xí)作（第四段）

語(yǔ)言修改

However we estimated the conclusion with too much confidence, and it was proved that moving to the city was a disaster. There is too much tail gas released from automobiles, which made us cough. The nights are so bright and noisy that we cannot sleep well. Thus, although we get more sleep time, we are even sleepier at study or work.

However, we were overconfident and the move to the city proved a disaster.[7] In the city there is a lot of gas exhaust from cars, which made us cough.[8] The nights were so bright and noisy that we could not sleep well. Thus, although we had more time to sleep at night, we were even more tired.

學(xué)生習(xí)作（第五段）

語(yǔ)言修改

Every coin has two sides. We only noticed the positive side but lost the negative side, so we did not conclude the truth. The wrong decision was a lesson from which we learned that it is necessary to see both sides of an issue in order to discover the new truth. Now we are considering to moving back to the rural area, but this time, we will make a complete study bore we carry it out.

We only focused on the positive side and not the negative so our conclusion was not accurate.[9] The wrong decision was a lesson from which we learned that it is necessary to see both sides of an issue in order to discover the new truth. We are now considering to move back to the village but this time we will do a thorough investigation bore making our decision.[10]

學(xué)生習(xí)作（第一段）

語(yǔ)言修改

People often focus mostly on the advantageous side when they make a decision. Thus they often neglect the other side of the decision, which may lead to an unpleasant end. My family was also not able to avoid this kind of regrettable experience. From that failure, we should see both sides of an issue.

Most often when people make a decision they focus on the advantages. Thus they often neglect the other side of the decision, which may lead to an unpleasant end. My family was also not able to avoid this kind of regrettable experience. From that failure, we should see both sides of an issue.

學(xué)生習(xí)作（第二段）

語(yǔ)言修改

My family used to live in a village, but my parents went to urban to work and I to study. It was a long distance, so we had to spend an average of 3.5 hours in our car everyday. We had to get up early to set out and return home late at night. Moreover, we could not watch TV together, but be together in the car, feeling sleepy. Of course, we were unwilling to accept the situation and we thought of moving to the urban area to save our time and to live a more convenient life. So we did, half a year ago.

My family used to live in a village, but my parents moved[1] to the city to work and I to study. It was a long distance to travel to the city every day with an average of 3.5 hours spent in our car.[2] We had to get up early to set out and return home late at night. Unlike other families that watch TV or have other fun together, we spent hours in a car, which was boring and even painful. Of course, this situation was unacceptable to us so we thought of moving to the city to save time and make our lives more convenient.[3]. So we did, half a year ago.

學(xué)生習(xí)作（第三段）

語(yǔ)言修改

Bore we made up our minds, we did investigated what trouble we would face. We were optimist to conclude that there was only one thing[4], the higher cost of living, which we could set aside by less using the car. We also predicted that we could gain profits such as a lot of time we used to spend on highways, convenient life, etc.

Bore we made up our minds, we investigated what troubles we may face[5]. We were optimistic that the only obstacle was the higher cost of living which we could offset by using the car less. We also concluded we would gain a lot in terms of[6] less time spent on the road, more convenient lifestyle, etc.

學(xué)生習(xí)作（第四段）

語(yǔ)言修改

However we estimated the conclusion with too much confidence, and it was proved that moving to the city was a disaster. There is too much tail gas released from automobiles, which made us cough. The nights are so bright and noisy that we cannot sleep well. Thus, although we get more sleep time, we are even sleepier at study or work.

However, we were overconfident and the move to the city proved a disaster.[7] In the city there is a lot of gas exhaust from cars, which made us cough.[8] The nights were so bright and noisy that we could not sleep well. Thus, although we had more time to sleep at night, we were even more tired.